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Band 4.0CEFR B163 words

Compared to past, more people are now trying to learn a foreign language to increase their chances of landing a better job in their native country or to have better opportunities to work abroad. To what extent do you agree with this point of view?

The response is severely underdeveloped and incomplete, consisting only of a short introductory fragment that fails to answer the task prompt. It exhibits frequent grammatical e...

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Prompt

Compared to past, more people are now trying to learn a foreign language to increase their chances of landing a better job in their native country or to have better opportunities to work abroad. To what extent do you agree with this point of view?

Essay review

Annotated essay

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There is no denying the fact that improving your qualifications will impact your career positively. While it is a commonly held belief that studying a foreign languages will boost their chances to secure a better job, eather, in their native country or in another foreign country; there also an argument opposes it.

However, this essay will discuss the reasons and state my opinine.

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Band & CEFR

Band 4.0

CEFR B1 · High

Assessment summary

The response is severely underdeveloped and incomplete, consisting only of a short introductory fragment that fails to answer the task prompt. It exhibits frequent grammatical errors, severe punctuation and sentence boundary problems, and very basic vocabulary. Task response is extremely limited due to the lack of body paragraphs and a clear position.

Scoring criteria

Task Response 4.0

Strengths

    Weaknesses

    • The essay is extremely short and cuts off before presenting any body paragraphs or an argument.
    • The introduction mentions that there is an argument opposing the trend, but it never develops either side of the issue.
    • The thesis statement is vague and fails to state a clear personal position on the extent of agreement.

    Fails to meet minimum length expectations for a full discussion and completely lacks body paragraphs and substantive task coverage, corresponding to Band 4.0.

    Coherence & Cohesion 4.0

    Strengths

      Weaknesses

      • The text is fragmented into an incomplete introduction and a disconnected single-sentence transition.
      • Severe misuse of punctuation breaks apart the introductory sentence awkwardly.
      • Overall progression is absent because the essay ends prematurely.

      Coherence is disrupted by severe structural incompleteness and poor punctuation, resulting in disjointed text.

      Lexical Resource 4.5

      Strengths

      • Attempts some topic-appropriate phrasing such as 'improving your qualifications' and 'foreign language'.

      Weaknesses

      • Vocabulary is very basic and limited.
      • Contains spelling errors such as 'eather' and 'opinine'.
      • Lacks precise academic collocations and lexical variety.

      Limited vocabulary with frequent spelling errors and basic phrasing restricts the lexical score to 4.5.

      Grammar Range & Accuracy 4.0

      Strengths

      • Attempts complex sentence structures such as 'While it is a commonly held belief...'.

      Weaknesses

      • Contains severe grammatical errors, including pluralization mismatch ('a foreign languages'), missing verbs ('there also an argument'), and severe punctuation/semicolon misuse.
      • Sentence boundary controls fail completely in the opening paragraph.
      • Grammatical control is unstable even across simple clauses.

      Frequent major grammatical errors, agreement breakdowns, and severe punctuation faults prevent the score from exceeding Band 4.0.

      Writing stats

      Words
      63
      Paragraphs
      2
      Grammar issues
      4
      Lexical suggestions
      3
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