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Band 4.5CEFR B1215 words

Consumers are faced with increasing number pf advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think consumers are influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them?

The response addresses both parts of the prompt with a visible stance, but it suffers from severe grammatical errors, run-on sentences, punctuation issues, and informal or awkwa...

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Prompt

Consumers are faced with increasing number pf advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think consumers are influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them?

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Purchasers are continually swamped with an accelerating amount of advertisements from competing corporations. the question is how much do the buyers get impacted by these commercials? and is their anything that can be done for their safeguarding from predatory ads?

The way massive quantities of commercials function, is that by swamping the feeds and surrounding of people subconsciously will be convinced to switch companies for the services and or products they consume, this technique relies majority on the hidden factors of peoples mind which can be viewed as a "dirty" method of earning more revenue.

As a general understanding in any free market promotion is one of the greatest ways of getting new consumers of any products and or services, this being said competition in between companies is a real tactic to gain new buyers and consumers for their services as a whole, this being said you can say that most time these paths to getting new consmers from other rivals can be a bit predatory, and it falls on the governments of each country to establish failsafes to safeguard consumers from those methods. so by implementing laws over companies to stop them from monopolising competitions and stopping predatory tactics you can control and stop a massive amount of that for the whole consumer pool.

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Band & CEFR

Band 4.5

CEFR B1 · High

Assessment summary

The response addresses both parts of the prompt with a visible stance, but it suffers from severe grammatical errors, run-on sentences, punctuation issues, and informal or awkward vocabulary. The structure lacks clear paragraphs with controlled topic development, and the mechanical flow is frequently disrupted by fused sentences and capitalization mistakes.

Scoring criteria

Task Response 5.0

Strengths

  • Addresses both aspects of the prompt (the extent of influence and measures for protection).
  • Establishes a recognizable stance regarding predatory advertising and government intervention.

Weaknesses

  • Arguments are underdeveloped and rely on sweeping assertions rather than concrete examples.
  • The discussion of consumer influence is vague and relies on informal phrasing.

The writer attempts all parts of the task and maintains a consistent position, but the ideas lack full extension and empirical support, fitting Band 5.0.

Coherence & Cohesion 4.5

Strengths

  • Attempts to structure the essay into an introduction and body paragraphs.

Weaknesses

  • Paragraphing is problematic, with run-on sentences and massive block paragraphs lacking clear internal cohesion.
  • Repetitive reliance on 'this being said' and informal transitional structures rather than precise cohesive devices.

The text lacks clear progression and uses run-on structures, creating significant reader burden and justifying a 4.5 score.

Lexical Resource 5.0

Strengths

  • Uses some topic-relevant vocabulary such as 'advertisements', 'competing corporations', and 'free market'.

Weaknesses

  • Frequent spelling errors ('pf', 'their' instead of 'there') and incorrect word forms ('majority' instead of 'mostly', 'consmers').
  • Limited control of academic register, using conversational fillers and informal expressions ('a bit predatory', 'you can say').

Vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with noticeable word-formation and spelling errors that restrict precision, aligning with Band 5.0.

Grammar Range & Accuracy 4.0

Strengths

  • Attempts complex structures such as subordinate and relative clauses.

Weaknesses

  • Pervasive punctuation and sentence boundary errors, including sentence fragments, fused sentences, and missing capital letters.
  • Repeated grammatical errors such as subject-verb disagreement ('is their anything') and incorrect pronoun usage.

Grammatical control is weak throughout, with numerous run-on sentences, capitalization failures, and basic errors occurring across simple and complex clauses, fitting Band 4.0.

Writing stats

Words
215
Paragraphs
3
Grammar issues
6
Lexical suggestions
5
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