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Demand of food is increasing worlwide. What are the causes of this? What measures can the international community take to make sure the food supply is enough?

The essay addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing causes such as population growth and globalisation, and offering international solutions like open trade and agricultura...

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Demand of food is increasing worlwide. What are the causes of this? What measures can the international community take to make sure the food supply is enough?

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The need for food is increasingly rising globally. This essay attempts to shed light on the causes of this trend before suggesting some solutions to ensure that there is enough food supply.

The foremost reasons for the increasing food demand are population and globalisation. In recent ages, the number of newborn individuals has experienced a dramatic growth, which requires an enormous supply of food to nurture babies. That of animals simultaneously mirrors such a pattern, demanding enough diet to serve human benefits, including eating itself. Globalisation is also the root cause of this trend. Eating is no longer a habit for mere survival, but has turned into an international culture through exchanged foreign food and worldwide social media. By capturing delicious images of desserts, mastering new, rare, local dishes, or presenting luxury meals, more diverse, exotic cuisines are becoming desired and attracting millions to experience them.

There are some possible measures to ensure the availability of food for the international community. The priority solution is to maintain open trade and fair distribution flowing across the world. Major food exporting nations should continue to provide internation market and consumers, while importing countries must keep ports and borders open, ensuring proper food safety provisions are in place. China is a strong example, which helps sustain market access through its green channels policy, enabling food to be fast-tracked both within provinces and at ports. Furthermore, the food and land use sector should be properly funded with the long-term capital and incentives needed to reward the supply of nutritious, affordable food. Investments can focus on increasing the resilience and diversity of food supply chains, reducing food loss and waste, developing regional food systems, providing vital social protection to farmers and to rural communities, accelerating greater digitisation and transparency across the value chain and rebuilding natural capital. This point must not be overlooked; there is no viable long-term response to the COVID-19 pandemic without the protection and restoration of the world’s critical remaining ecosystems, and a concerted effort to curb the wildlife trade.

In conclusion, the global world nowadays has met with surging food requirements, which can be attributed to a booming population and worldwide integration. With external trade and investment in diverse food and land, we can ultimately avoid a food crisis and ensure its availability.

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Band 6.0

CEFR B2 · High

Assessment summary

The essay addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing causes such as population growth and globalisation, and offering international solutions like open trade and agricultural investment. The argument is generally clear and easy to follow, with an appropriate academic tone. However, the response contains several vocabulary inaccuracies, spelling mistakes, and awkward collocations (e.g., 'internation market', 'number of newborn individuals'), as well as occasional grammatical and stylistic lapses. Overall, it demonstrates competent B2-level performance.

Scoring criteria

Task Response 6.5

Strengths

  • Addresses both required tasks: identifying causes of increasing food demand and proposing international measures to secure the food supply.
  • Maintains a clear stance throughout the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.

Weaknesses

  • Some supporting points are broad or overly generalised without deep analytical extension.
  • The example regarding China's green channels policy is somewhat descriptive rather than deeply integrated into the international community's measures.

All parts of the prompt are addressed with a clear position and relevant ideas, satisfying Band 6.5 requirements for Task Response.

Coherence & Cohesion 6.0

Strengths

  • Paragraphs are logically structured, starting with a clear introduction, separate body paragraphs for causes and solutions, and a brief conclusion.
  • Cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'In conclusion', and relative pronouns are used to connect ideas.

Weaknesses

  • Some cohesive transitions feel slightly formulaic or mechanical.
  • Referencing in places lacks precision, such as 'That of animals simultaneously mirrors such a pattern'.

Information and ideas are generally arranged coherently with clear overall progression, though paragraph internal cohesion and referencing show some awkwardness.

Lexical Resource 6.0

Strengths

  • Attempts a wide range of vocabulary related to food security, globalisation, and economics ('globalisation', 'resilience', 'digitisation', 'transparency').
  • Includes some academic nominalisations and topic-specific terms.

Weaknesses

  • Contains recurring vocabulary errors and unnatural collocations (e.g., 'internation market', 'newborn individuals').
  • Includes a spelling mistake ('worlwide' in prompt, but 'worlwide' vs 'worldwide' handled; 'internation' instead of 'international').

An adequate range of vocabulary is used with some attempt at less common items, but inaccuracy in word choice and spelling prevents a higher band.

Grammar Range & Accuracy 6.0

Strengths

  • Demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, including relative clauses and participial phrases.
  • Control of basic grammar is generally sound, and meaning remains clear despite minor slips.

Weaknesses

  • Contains minor grammatical slips and awkward phrasing in complex structures (e.g., 'met with surging food requirements', 'demanding enough diet').
  • Punctuation and preposition choices occasionally require rereading.

The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms with generally good control, though errors in phrasing and minor grammar/mechanics persist.

Writing stats

Words
382
Paragraphs
4
Grammar issues
1
Lexical suggestions
4
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