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Band 4.5CEFR B198 words

Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at an alarming rate. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions?

The essay is incomplete and breaks off mid-sentence in the second body paragraph. It demonstrates very limited task completion, repetitive vocabulary, and frequent grammatical e...

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Prompt

Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at an alarming rate. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions?

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Climate change is one of the greatest issues earth is confronting today. We have more summers than winters, and this is because of the increase in degree of temperature. This esay shall discuss about the troubles connected with global warming and some plausible solutions that might help to deal with the problems.

To begin with, one considerable trouble related to global warming and rise of sea levels is the threat of flooding in coastal zones. There is a possibility to loss of natural habitat including humans and a myriad species. This also leads to exacerbating biodiversity loss and

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Band & CEFR

Band 4.5

CEFR B1 · High

Assessment summary

The essay is incomplete and breaks off mid-sentence in the second body paragraph. It demonstrates very limited task completion, repetitive vocabulary, and frequent grammatical errors such as spelling mistakes and incorrect prepositional usage. A higher band requires a full response with proper paragraph development and accurate grammar.

Scoring criteria

Task Response 4.0

Strengths

  • The introduction identifies both parts of the prompt (problems and solutions).

Weaknesses

  • The essay is severely incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence in the second body paragraph.
  • Solutions are mentioned in the introduction but never actually discussed in the body paragraphs.
  • Development of ideas is extremely minimal.

The response is incomplete and fails to address all parts of the prompt adequately due to truncation, earning a band 4.0 for Task Response.

Coherence & Cohesion 5.0

Strengths

  • Basic paragraph structure is attempted with an introduction and body paragraphs.

Weaknesses

  • The essay terminates abruptly, preventing any overall progression or conclusion.
  • Cohesive devices are very basic.

Although basic paragraph breaks are present, the abrupt truncation and lack of a conclusion limit overall coherence and progression to band 5.0.

Lexical Resource 4.5

Strengths

  • Attempts some topic-related vocabulary such as 'climate change', 'biodiversity', and 'coastal zones'.

Weaknesses

  • Relies on basic vocabulary ('biggest threats', 'troubles') and informal phrasing ('We have more summers than winters').
  • Contains spelling errors ('esay') and awkward collocations ('increase in degree of temperature', 'possibility to loss').

Lexical range is limited and repetitive, with noticeable spelling and word choice errors, supporting a band 4.5.

Grammar Range & Accuracy 4.5

Strengths

  • Simple sentence structures are occasionally formed correctly.

Weaknesses

  • Frequent grammatical errors include missing articles ('earth' instead of 'the Earth'), incorrect prepositions ('discuss about'), and clumsy phrasing.
  • Complex sentence attempts are often ungrammatical.

Grammatical control is weak with frequent errors that disrupt clarity, warranting a band 4.5.

Writing stats

Words
98
Paragraphs
2
Grammar issues
2
Lexical suggestions
10
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