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“Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating disease is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree.

The essay addresses the prompt with a clear position in favour of preventative measures, but the development is repetitive, overly simplistic, and lacks fully elaborated support...

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Prompt

“Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating disease is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree.

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There is no denying the fact that nowadays people become more awarence about how to become healthier. While it is a commonly held belief that researching and treating disease is expensive , so it would be prevention is better than cure,there is also an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that investments in preventative measures are so much better.

To begin with, prevention is less costly than a cure. In other words, treating disease costs governments large amounts. In addition, prevention such as vaccinations and periodic check-ups is cheaper , so the governments can save money in the long term. For example, providing free vaccinations or periodic health checks.

Another point to consider, Prevention help to reduce the number of patients

. It is also possible to say that if people fllowing healthy lifestyle reduce the incidence of diseases, this relieves the pressure on hospitals and doctors. Moreover, improving the quality of life, it helps people on life with better health. For instance, reduce pain and suffering, and increase the average age.

In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that prevention helps to reduce costs and save money, also reduce number of patients and improves people's quality of life.

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Band & CEFR

Band 5.0

CEFR B1 · High

Assessment summary

The essay addresses the prompt with a clear position in favour of preventative measures, but the development is repetitive, overly simplistic, and lacks fully elaborated supporting examples. There are frequent grammatical errors, awkward collocations, and punctuation issues that hinder smooth readability, though the general meaning remains understandable.

Scoring criteria

Task Response 5.5

Strengths

  • The introduction and conclusion clearly state the writer's position that prevention is better than cure.

Weaknesses

  • Body paragraphs contain very limited extension and rely on simple assertion or unfinished sentence fragments.
  • Examples are incomplete or overly brief, such as 'For example, providing free vaccinations or periodic health checks' which lacks a main verb.

The writer addresses all parts of the task and maintains a clear stance. However, the ideas are inadequately developed with weak examples, leading to a score of 5.5 under Task Response.

Coherence & Cohesion 5.0

Strengths

  • Paragraphing is attempted with clear division between introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.

Weaknesses

  • Basic and repetitive cohesive devices ('In other words', 'In addition', 'Moreover') are overused.
  • There are severe sentence boundary and fragment issues, such as a stray period in the middle of a paragraph and dangling fragments.

While there is an overall progression, the lack of smooth transitions, mechanical linkers, and fragmented sentences disrupt the flow and reader comfort, warranting a 5.0.

Lexical Resource 5.0

Strengths

  • Some appropriate topic vocabulary is used, such as 'vaccinations', 'treatments', and 'hospitals'.

Weaknesses

  • Frequent word formation and vocabulary errors, such as 'awarence' instead of 'awareness'.
  • Limited lexical range with repeated use of basic structures and vague phrasings like 'become more awarence' and 'helps people on life'.

The vocabulary is limited and contains noticeable errors in word formation and collocation, restricting the lexical score to 5.0.

Grammar Range & Accuracy 4.5

Strengths

  • Some simple sentences are grammatically correct and understandable.

Weaknesses

  • Persistent subject-verb agreement and tense/clause control errors, such as 'Prevention help', 'people fllowing', and 'it would be prevention is better than cure'.
  • Frequent punctuation and spacing errors around commas and periods.

Grammatical control is weak, with multiple major errors in simple and complex structures, sentence fragments, and frequent basic slips that impede accuracy across the text.

Writing stats

Words
204
Paragraphs
5
Grammar issues
9
Lexical suggestions
4
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