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Band 5.5CEFR B2289 words

Some believe buildings should be built in a way that serves their purpose rather than just look beautiful. Others, however, say buildings should represent art too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

The essay addresses both views regarding the purpose and aesthetic value of buildings and presents a clear personal opinion. However, it suffers from frequent grammatical errors...

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Prompt

Some believe buildings should be built in a way that serves their purpose rather than just look beautiful. Others, however, say buildings should represent art too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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In modern society, housing plays a vital role in people’s standard of living. It is a controversial topic whether simple house with basic amenities is beneficial or decroative builidings are far-reaching. Although simple house is afforadable, I strongly believe that buildings with art broaden individuals’ horizon.

The compelling factor of building with an architectural designs is that it allows individuals to create an imagination skills. Many people tend to feel not only stress but also tired after hectic shedule, so decorating wall pictures driven them to develop habit of drawings. In the long run, it enhances thinking skills and also makes peaceful environment in the house which faclitates to boost emotional wellbeing. For instance, many urban cities in an Indian houses are often contructed with the paintings and carvings based on customers choice, that expand their knowledge of paintings and also enhance their cultrual value. Therefore, buidling with wall paintings allows individuals to gain insights into art.

Despite the fact that architectural houses boost customers innovative skills, many assert that simple houses contribute to live budget friendly. This is primarily because, many low-income families are more likely to struggles to maintain their living expenses, thereby, constructing cost-effective houses with fulfilling their purpose reduces prices on materials. Consequently this approach allows everyone to deserves a basic standard of living. For instance, many families from countrysides live in just a spacious houses fulfilling their basic necessitis of living, which allows them to maintain their healthy diet. Thus, adopting this approach enables people to strengthen physical and mental wellbeing.

In conclusion, even though simple houses are cheaper and improves quality of life, I strongly believe that house with arts boraden individuals’ creativity and innovative ideas. Ultimately, it builds prosperous and sustainable society.

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Band & CEFR

Band 5.5

CEFR B2 · High

Assessment summary

The essay addresses both views regarding the purpose and aesthetic value of buildings and presents a clear personal opinion. However, it suffers from frequent grammatical errors, awkward word choices, spelling mistakes, and issues with coherence and task response depth. The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, and many sentences lack precision or grammatical accuracy.

Scoring criteria

Task Response 6.0

Strengths

  • The introduction presents a clear personal stance on the topic.
  • Both views (functional vs. artistic buildings) are discussed across the body paragraphs.
  • The conclusion reiterates the writer's position.

Weaknesses

  • Arguments in the body paragraphs lack rigorous academic elaboration and rely on vague or tenuous examples.
  • Some supporting claims, such as the idea that wall paintings directly help low-stress schedules or physical wellbeing, are underdeveloped or unconvincing.

The essay addresses all parts of the prompt and maintains a consistent position, fulfilling the requirements for Band 6.0. However, the lack of well-developed supporting evidence prevents a higher score.

Coherence & Cohesion 5.5

Strengths

  • Paragraphs are structured with discernible topic openings and concluding summaries.
  • Basic cohesive devices such as 'Although', 'For instance', and 'In conclusion' are employed.

Weaknesses

  • Logical progression within paragraphs is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing and abrupt transitions.
  • Reference links and cohesive ties are sometimes unclear or mechanical.

While information is organized into paragraphs, the overall flow is hindered by awkward syntax and imprecise cohesive devices, fitting a Band 5.5 level.

Lexical Resource 5.0

Strengths

  • Attempts to use topic-relevant vocabulary such as 'architectural designs', 'aesthetic', and 'amenities'.

Weaknesses

  • Frequent spelling errors ('decroative', 'builidings', 'afforadable', 'shedule', 'cultrual', 'buidling') impair readability.
  • Repetitive use of basic vocabulary and non-standard collocations ('create an imagination skills', 'contribute to live budget friendly').

The vocabulary is limited, with noticeable spelling and word formation errors that frequently require rereading, corresponding to Band 5.0.

Grammar Range & Accuracy 5.0

Strengths

  • Attempts complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions like 'Although' and 'Despite the fact that'.

Weaknesses

  • Frequent grammatical errors including subject-verb disagreement, incorrect verb forms, and missing articles.
  • Many complex structures are malformed, such as 'allows individuals to create an imagination skills' and 'contribute to live budget friendly'.

A wide range of structures is attempted, but frequent grammatical errors across simple and complex sentences result in a Band 5.0 score.

Writing stats

Words
289
Paragraphs
4
Grammar issues
15
Lexical suggestions
5
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