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Band 3.5CEFR A2159 words

Some people think it does not matter if a professional sportsman or sportswoman misbehaves on or off the field if they play well. What is your opinion about this?

The essay falls short of basic requirements due to severe and pervasive grammatical, spelling, and lexical errors that severely impede communication. While a basic position is d...

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Prompt

Some people think it does not matter if a professional sportsman or sportswoman misbehaves on or off the field if they play well. What is your opinion about this?

Essay review

Annotated essay

Interactive

Professional sports both man and woman should combined both good behaves and attitude with play will.

According to my prospective, i think playes have so many fans which are coping their behavior and attitude further more they take them as their role models especially those younger kids and teenagers.

Players are representing thier institutions and clubes, so if some player misbehaves in the field i thinks its reflect their club vision and values, a survey and study made in United States in 2015 about what's attracting team supporters in any club or sports, and the results came that 60% of people starts to like and support the club from one famous player which acts and play in a certain way.

Finally, attitude and behavior matters in any feild and area, specially in formal and worldwide institutions and industries and the most important in my opinion for sports because it's represent and connected to the player community, country and environment.

Error patterns

Band & CEFR

Band 3.5

CEFR A2 · High

Assessment summary

The essay falls short of basic requirements due to severe and pervasive grammatical, spelling, and lexical errors that severely impede communication. While a basic position is discernible, the lack of coherent paragraphing, sentence boundary control, and proper vocabulary prevents the development of a coherent argument.

Scoring criteria

Task Response 4.0

Strengths

  • The writer attempts to address the prompt by expressing an opinion that good behavior is important.

Weaknesses

  • Arguments are extremely underdeveloped and lack clear organization or adequate support.
  • The response relies on assertions and generalizations without logical progression.

The writer attempts to present a viewpoint on sports behavior, but the arguments remain undeveloped, superficial, and heavily constrained by language deficiencies, meeting the criteria for Band 4.0.

Coherence & Cohesion 3.5

Strengths

  • Basic paragraph divisions are attempted.

Weaknesses

  • The text lacks clear logical progression, with run-on sentences and chaotic clause structures.
  • Cohesive devices are misused or absent, resulting in a disconnected flow of ideas.

Paragraphing is rudimentary, and the lack of proper punctuation or logical transitions creates substantial reader effort, aligning with Band 3.5.

Lexical Resource 3.5

Strengths

  • Common words such as 'fans', 'country', and 'survey' are used appropriately in context.

Weaknesses

  • Severe spelling errors across basic and content words (e.g., 'playes', 'thier', 'feild').
  • Very limited vocabulary with constant repetition and non-standard word choices.

The vocabulary is extremely limited and marred by pervasive spelling and word-formation errors, restricting the score to Band 3.5.

Grammar Range & Accuracy 3.0

Strengths

  • A few simple clause structures are attempted.

Weaknesses

  • Pervasive grammatical errors including severe subject-verb agreement issues, incorrect verb forms, and fused sentences.
  • Total absence of complex structures executed correctly.

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the text, featuring frequent sentence boundary errors and major structural breakdowns, warranting a Band 3.0.

Writing stats

Words
159
Paragraphs
4
Grammar issues
13
Lexical suggestions
6
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